各位同學，好！

寫作在廣東高考英語試卷中占40分，比重很大，也是同們學拉分的重點題型。從這期開始，同各位聊聊寫作。下面就以2012年高考廣東卷讀寫任務題為例，分析如何寫，才可以得高分。

閱讀下面短文，然后按要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

My husband received a letter a month ago from a young woman who had been his student when she was in middle school. She wrote thanking him for having a great influence in her life.

In the letter she wrote，“You were the teacher who helped me discover my talent for math. Before you came to teach us， I had been terribly poor at math， and had never thought that I would be interested in it. To my surprise， you magically showed me the beauty of math. I guess that was the turning point of my attitude towards it. Gradually my interest in it began to grow. Thanks to your encouragement， I made continuous progress in math， and finally made up my mind to study it in the university. Today I am working as an accountant at Valley Medical Center in California. You played an important part. Thank you！”

What a wonderful gift to a retired teacher！ My husband has received many letters from students over the years. This one was special， for it arrived at this time in his life when he is in very poor health.

[寫作內容]

1. 以約30個詞概括上文的主要內容。

2. 以約120個詞就老師影響考生的話題談談你的想法，內容包括：

（1）上文使你想起哪位對你幫助最大的老師；

（2）舉例說明該老師對你學習或成長的影響；

（3）你怎樣看待老師對考生的影響。

[寫作要求]

1. 作文中可以使用自己的親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2. 作文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。

[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內容合適，語篇連貫。

解題過程分析

任務1，概括主要內容。

此任務考查考生的三大能力： 閱讀 、 歸納、 寫作。

第一步，閱讀語段。

該段落都是簡單的閱讀段落，一個基礎扎實的考生是應該能讀懂題目的。如果題目沒有讀懂，松哥只能說，不好意思，請先學習高考考綱詞匯，詞匯背熟了再來聽我的解析啦。

第二步，歸納要點。

讀懂后，顯然，閱讀材料的主要信息有三：1.作者的老公收到了信件；2.表達對作者老公的感激；3.作者很感動。

第三步， 組合語言。

用大約30個詞。既然是大約，那么就不能太多或者太少，以25～35個為宜。好的，下面我們一起來組合語言。

第一句：作者的老公收到了信件。 這個信息的主要短語是 receive a letter，注意時間是一個月前，所以必須是過去式。The authors husband received a letter a month ago.

第二句：表達感激?？忌梢詫慹xpress thanks， 當然詞匯量大的同學可以show這個表達：express ones gratitude

第三句：作者很感動。感動怎么說？be moved 或者 get moved。

接下來，把整個信息組合成一個句子。大意是：一個月前，作者老公收到了一封郵件，是一個學生對他的感激之情。作者很感動。

各位，這個句子的寫法我建議從實際出發(fā)，基礎好的同學可以寫從句?；A薄弱的同學建議用簡單句。

單句的寫法：

The authors husband received a letter a month ago. In the letter， the student expressed her thanks to him for encouraging her to study maths. The author was moved. （30 words）

復雜句子的寫法：

The authors husband received a letter a month ago，in which the student expressed gratitude for motivating her to study maths and therefore， the author got moved. （28 words）endprint

對比一下，哪個更好？顯然是復雜句，一個句子只有28個詞，內容全部覆蓋，句子緊湊明了。在這個句子里面，含有一個由“介詞+關系代詞”引導的非限制定語從句，還有一個由and therefore 連接的并列句。詞匯層面，gratitude， motivate（激勵）都展示了不俗的寫作實力。開門出亮點，抓住了閱卷老師的眼球。

那么，如何才能讓自己練成寫作天山童姥呢？那么，你要認真地去聽松哥之后的句子大法了，我們稍后分析。

OK， 任務1搞定之后，我們來看任務2。

任務2，談談你的看法。

做題思路：

1. 解題找要點；

2. 詞匯移花再接木；

3. 亮句串成隊。

第一步，找要點。

任務2 共有三個要點，題中已非常清楚：1. 想起一個老師；2. 對自己的影響；3. 我的看法。

第二步，考慮用詞。

要點（1），各位請思考，“使我想起一個老師”怎么寫？

小A同學不假思索地說：make me think of a teacher，不錯，但是不夠亮。

小B同學自信地說：remind me of a teacher，很好！掌聲！

如果是松哥，會寫什么呢？The passage naturally associates me with a teacher who...

你們可能會問，為什么我能想到這個表達呢？其實，如果你能耐心地聽我下文解析詞匯大法，你也行。只要你能耐心地跟著我的思路走，讀完我的作品，相信，你也可以成為寫作大師。

要點（2），對自己的影響。這一段需要論證，如何論證，先寫一個中心句，這個老師對我的影響很大?！皩ξ矣绊懞艽蟆痹趺磳?？have a great influence/effect on me這個短語屬于常見詞組，教大家一個經典表達：be of enormous significance to sb.

要點（3），我的看法？這一段屬于思維層面，需要考生想出相關細節(jié)來證明老師對孩子的影響。思考，我認為怎么表達？As far as I am concerned， 有些同學異口同聲地說出這個詞組，其實這個詞組是一個很口語化的表達，建議不要使用。松哥教給大家一個很cool的表達，on a personal level 記住喲，這個短語可是抓老師眼球的表達，一般人我不告訴他。哈，開個玩笑。

第三步，寫句成文。

好了，詞匯我們想好了，下一步，組合句子。松哥下面貼出一篇原創(chuàng)的文章供大家分享。

The passage above associates me with a person， who was my middle school English teacher and selflessly devoted all her life to teaching.

The teacher was of enormous significance to my life in various respects. What is worth mentioning first is that she surely knew how to overcome the barrier in my studies although I， at the essential turning point of my life， was disgusted with my school lives. Unlike other teachers， she never refused to help those with poor academic performances who were in greater need.

On a personal level， it goes without saying that teachers are the touchstone of students. They play a crucial part in students growth by providing knowledge and instilling high morals， as well as acting as emotional role models. （125 words）

行文思路分析

上文是松哥一篇拙作，僅供大家參考?，F在簡單解析一下行文思路。

詞匯層面：

大家一定發(fā)現了很多精彩的表達，比如：associate me with a person， selflessly devoted all her life to teaching， be of enormous significance to， in various respects， overcome the barrier in my studies， at the essential turning point of my life， be disgusted with， on a personal level， play a crucial part in， instill high morals等。

有的同學說，這些啊，太難呢，我學不會啊。我怎么知道考試可以用這些表達呢？沒關系，你缺的是一個有能幫你整理的老師，松哥很愿意為你做這些事情。聽完我下期連載，你一定不會有這方面的顧慮了哦。

句法方面：

定語從句：The passage above associated me with a person， who was my middle school English teacher and selflessly devoted all her life to teaching.endprint

主語從句與插入語：What is worth mentioning first is that she surely knew how to overcome the barrier in my studies although I， at the essential turning point of my life， was disgusted with my school lives.

形式主語從句：It goes without saying that teachers are the touchstone of students.

簡單平衡句：They play a crucial part in studentsgrowth by providing knowledge and instilling high morals， as well as acting as emotional role models.

再加上個性生動的簡單句，你看，一篇錯落有致的高考作文就這樣出現了。有那么難嗎？

難死啦，有些同學說，為什么難？是因為你根本沒有針對地培養(yǎng)過句子素養(yǎng)？句法問題我打算連載幾篇文章，只要你把我的練習做完，學不好，你來找我。不怕難，就怕你的復習沒有系統(tǒng)。

思維方面：

對個人的影響，我想到了曾幾何時，我是個厭學的考生，我的老師感染了我。

how to overcome the barrier in my studies although I， at the essential turning point of my life， was disgusted with my school lives. Unlike other teachers， she never refused to help those with poor academic performances who were in greater need.

對于眾人的影響，我想到了傳到授業(yè)解惑，當然，也有精神層面的，什么時代了，老師不但是教書，還要是心理醫(yī)生。

They play a crucial part in studentsgrowth by providing knowledge and instilling high morals， as well as acting as emotional role models.

有些人說，松哥，你怎么可以想這么多?。繛槭裁茨?？等到思維層面，我們再細說啦。

好了，以上就是我對這篇文章的解析，大家看到了寫好一篇作文，需要個性的詞匯，出彩的句法，以及豐富的思想。希望能幫到大家。

謝謝！

新東方大學外語部 丁雪松

責任編校 蔣小青endprint