楊金雨
Different people like different seasons. Someone likes spring because its energetic. Someone likes fall because its cool. However, I like winter best.
As everyone knows, winter is cold. But why do I like winter? There are two reasons. First, my hometown is Harbin. It is well-known as the Ice City. I can join in many interesting activities about ice and snow. For example, skating is a good choice. In winter, the Songhua River is frozen, many people can play on ice. I can skate very fast. It makes me feel free and it can give me a special sense. How exciting it is! Second, I can enjoy the beautiful scenery of snow. I am an imaginative boy. So I always imagine snow is an angel in a white dress, a white animal, complete white trees and so on. I really like these white creatures. Because of these two reasons, I like winter better than the other seasons.
Though winter is a bleak season, it gives me much happiness that other seasons cant offer me. So I will always like winter best.
【簡評】本文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰,行文連貫,用生動細致的語言向讀者講述了自己最喜歡的季節(jié)。行文中,固定短語的恰當選用提升了文章的檔次,結(jié)尾段用不同的表達方式和開頭相呼應。本文是一篇布局謀篇合理,表達清晰的好文章。