汪冬姣

一般作文句子數(shù)量通常在八到十二句，如果以每句平均十個詞來計算，就可以用這十句左右的句子完成高考要求的100詞左右的文章了。其基本模式如下：

第一段兩句。主題句和拓展解釋。

第二段六句。圍繞wh-細節(jié)發(fā)展，提供具體信息服務(wù)主題句，注意句子人稱，時態(tài)，搭配等一致性；側(cè)重句子間過渡詞的運用，做到有效地表達上下文的邏輯關(guān)系；同時運用穿插段落間的過渡句，以增強作文的鑒賞力。

第三段兩句?？偨Y(jié)句和闡明自己的觀點。總結(jié)做到首尾呼應(yīng)，使結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊形成一個整體。收尾表明立場，強化主題。

范文1

大學(xué)畢業(yè)生就業(yè)難問題已引起全社會的廣泛關(guān)注，請你結(jié)合以下要點，寫一篇英語短文：

（1）就大學(xué)畢業(yè)生就業(yè)難的原因發(fā)表自己的看法（金融危機、教育體制等）；

（2）作為高中生，應(yīng)該怎么辦？

Its commonly known that its extremely difficult for college graduates to get an ideal job nowadays. I thought the reasons mainly include the following aspects.

First， the number of graduates is increasing， which makes the competition more and more severe. Second， many companies are cutting down the sizes due to the global financial crisis， so it is harder for graduates to get an ideal job. Third， at present our education lays too much emphasis on marks instead of ability. Therefore， our students dont have enough practical experience to adapt to society.

As a high school student， what we can do now is to study hard to lay a strong foundation for our future. Meanwhile， we should pay more attention to social practice not only some theories in the textbook. Only by doing so can we be better prepared for the future.

點評 本文是一篇議論文，合理地運用了三段式布局。第一段開門見山點明了主題；第二段詳細分析了造成畢業(yè)生找不到理想工作的三個原因，而且分別從當前大的社會環(huán)境、經(jīng)濟形勢以及學(xué)校教育三個不同角度來介紹，構(gòu)思巧妙，合情合理；第三段結(jié)合第二段的具體問題委婉地提出了兩點切實可行的建議，最后用強調(diào)句型來點睛整個文章。

范文2

目前部分學(xué)校明文規(guī)定女學(xué)生禁止留長頭發(fā)，否則就按違紀處理，就此現(xiàn)象發(fā)表你的看法。

Last week our class had a heat discussion about whether girl students must cut off their long hair. Opinions are divided among us.

More than half of the students are in favor of what the school has done， they hold the view that keeping long hair may occupy our lot of time and energy， on the other hand， we can devote more to our study with short hair. Besides， being a student， it will make us look more energetic to keep short hair.

However， the rest dont think so. In their opinion， its improper for the school to set such rules， saying that keeping long hair doesnt necessarily mean the students dont study hard and the stereotype of hair may make one look dull.

Personally speaking， I feel we students should pay more attention to our study instead of hair styles， after all， our time and energy are limited during school time.

點評 本篇文章的布局一目了然，第一段是討論的主題，第二段和第三段是兩種對立的觀點，最后一段是自己的看法。在段與段之間的銜接上也是很注重的，例如：“Opinions are divided among us.”一句承上啟下，“However， the rest dont think so”很好地過渡到了另一種觀點，同時又自然地引出了自己的看法。另外，本文還運用了豐富的詞匯和變化的句式，如：in favor of，occupy，devote more to，doesnt necessarily mean，stereotype...，賓語從句“whether girl students must cut off their long hair”和非謂語“keeping long hair may...”“being a student...”的使用也很頻繁。

例1 請根據(jù)以下信息完成下面的文章。

假設(shè)你班最近就圓明園是否應(yīng)該重建開展了一場討論，同學(xué)們的觀點有分歧，各自理由如下：

贊同：重現(xiàn)該園輝煌景象；

中華文明具體體現(xiàn)；

旅游新景點；

如部分恢復(fù)，可與廢墟對照，讓人們記住歷史。

反對：保持原樣更為合理；

警醒人們不忘過去；

重建并非必須；

破壞該地生態(tài)環(huán)境。

Should Yuanmingyuan Be Rebuilt？

Yuanmingyuan， “Garden of all gardens”， was burnt in 1860. Recently my classmates had a discussion about whether it should be rebuilt or not.

Supporters of rebuilding the garden say only by doing so

Those who disagree think it more reasonable to keep the garden like this.

So you see， opinions vary and its hard to say which is right and which is not.

解析

Should Yuanmingyuan Be Rebuilt？

Yuanmingyuan， “Garden of all gardens”， was burnt in 1860. Recently my classmates had a discussion about whether it should be rebuilt or not.

Supporters of rebuilding the garden say only by doing so can we see the original sight of the garden， which no wonder reflects the Chinese civilization. And it will be another place of interests for tourists. If partly rebuilt， it will provide a comparison and help us remember the history.

Those who disagree think it more reasonable to keep the garden like this. The ruins will remind us of the past. We should never forget the history. Other buildings like the Palace Museum and Summer Palace can also be symbols of the Chinese culture， so it is not necessary to rebuilt this garden. Some also worry that the environment will be destroyed when the construction goes on in this district.

So you see， opinions vary and its hard to say which is right and which is not.

例2 根據(jù)提示，寫出開頭、過渡、結(jié)尾句。

隨著人們環(huán)保意識的日益增強，不少城市發(fā)出了“減少白色污染”的倡議，得到了廣大市民的支持。請以此話題，在網(wǎng)站上發(fā)表評論并闡述你自己的建議。

內(nèi)容包括： 1. 廣泛用于購物場所的塑料袋也是主要的污染源，廢棄的塑料袋隨處可見；

2. 塑料袋不易分解，容易造成污染，甚至導(dǎo)致野生動物或海洋動物窒息而死；

3. “白色污染”有損中國形象；

4. 你自己的建議。

People should not be encouraged to use plastic bags.

（塑料袋在我們?nèi)粘Ｉ钪蟹浅Ｆ毡?，尤其在菜場、超市等部門被廣泛地使用。）

（眾所周知，塑料袋是最主要的污染物之一，并且我們能隨處看見堆成山的被扔的塑料袋。）Because plastic bags are not so degradable， it is easy for them to pollute our environment and even many wild or sea animals may be chocked to death by them. What is worse， “white pollution” does harm to the image of China.

So our government should make laws to forbid the use of plastic bags in department stores and supermarkets. Meanwhile， people should be encouraged to replace them with environmentally friendly paper bags or cloth ones.

.（只有這樣，我們才能使我們的地球保持干凈）

解析

People should not be encouraged to use plastic bags.

Plastic bags are very popular in our daily life， especially they are widely used in free markets， supermarkets or departments.

As we know， plastic bags are one of the major pollutants and we can see mountains of littered plastic bags thrown everywhere. Because plastic bags are not so degradable， it is easy for them to pollute our environment and even many wild or sea animals may be chocked to death by them. What is worse， “white pollution” does harm to the image of China.

So our government should make laws to forbid the use of plastic bags in department stores and supermarkets. Meanwhile， people should be encouraged to replace them with environmentally friendly paper bags or cloth ones. Only in this way， can we keep our earth clean.

例3 根據(jù)所給信息填關(guān)鍵詞。

今天，你收到好友小玲的一封信。信中說她過年想買一部手機，為此征求你的意見。根據(jù)以下提示，請你寫一封建議她不要買手機的回信。

提示：1.發(fā)短信會占據(jù)太多的學(xué)習(xí)時間；2.學(xué)校不允許用手機，因為會打擾別人；3.經(jīng)常會收到一些欺騙性的不良短信；4.手機費用增加父母的經(jīng)濟負擔(dān)。

Dear Xiao Ling，

Im very glad to 1 your letter today. How are you getting along with your study？

In your letter， you asked me 2 you should buy a mobile phone 3 not. In my opinion， it is 4 for a student. Why？ 5 ， using a mobile phone 6 too much to 7 or receive short messages. 8 ， the time you should 9 on studies 10 shorter. Second， it is 11 to use mobile phones at school 12 sometimes you have to 13 the call in class. Therefore， your behavior can 14 others. Third， you may be disturbed by some false 15 messages. 16 ， as a student 17 independent economy， you may have to ask parents 18 the phone expense. That is to say， they will burden more to 19 you than before.

In short， I suggest that you 20 my words twice.

Best wishes.

Yours friend，

Li Li

解析

Dear Xiao Ling，

Im very glad to receive your letter today. How are you getting along with your study？

In your letter， you asked me whether you should buy a mobile phone or not. In my opinion， it is unnecessary for a student. Why？ first， using a mobile phone takes too much to send or receive short messages. Therefore， the time you should spend on studies becomes shorter. Second， it is forbidden to use mobile phones at school because sometimes you have to respond the call in class. Therefore， your behavior can disturb others. Third， you may be disturbed by some false third messages. Short， as a student furthermore independent economy， you may have to ask parents without the phone expense. That is to say， they will burden more to support you than before.

In short， I suggest that you consider my words twice.

Best wishes.

Yours friend，

Li Li