安徽 魏 永

※典題感知

（2022屆安徽合肥高三?？迹┘俣闶歉呷龑W(xué)生李華，從網(wǎng)上得知英國(guó)牛津大學(xué)(the University of Oxford)將在暑假舉辦夏令營(yíng)。 請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一封電子郵件申請(qǐng)參加。 內(nèi)容主要包括：

1. 自我介紹(突出特長(zhǎng))；

2. 參加原因(文化交流、心儀大學(xué)等)；3. 希望獲批。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Sir or Madam,

Yours,Li Hua

佳作賞析1

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a senior three student from China. Having learned that a summer camp will be held by the University of Oxford①,I am writing to apply for a place②.

I believe my abilities make me stand out③. Participating in English speaking competitions④has given me strong communication skills. Therefore, I am able to speak English fluently.

This program attracts me for several reasons. First, it would encourage me to get to know the University of Oxford⑤.Second, I can attend cultural fairs and visit different cities,which would give me a better understanding of Western culture⑥.

I would treasure the chance to improve myself at the summer camp. I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours,Li Hua

亮點(diǎn)評(píng)析

①現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式Having learned...在句中作狀語(yǔ)，且其中含有that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，句式復(fù)雜多變。

②I am writing to... 句式點(diǎn)明寫(xiě)信目的，apply for是表示“申請(qǐng)”的典型短語(yǔ)。

③“動(dòng)詞+復(fù)合賓語(yǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)make me stand out是地道的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)。

④Participating in...是動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)，是書(shū)面表達(dá)的高級(jí)句式。

⑤動(dòng)詞不定式to get to know...表明申請(qǐng)?jiān)颉?/p>

⑥非限制性定語(yǔ)從句which would give...的使用，給文章添色不少。

佳句仿寫(xiě)1

①他已經(jīng)失敗了兩次，不想再試了。 （現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式作狀語(yǔ)）

②知道你要申請(qǐng)進(jìn)入我們大學(xué)，我很高興。 （apply for）

③雖然他曾經(jīng)常把他的小妹妹弄哭，但今天他被他的小妹妹弄哭了。 （make sb do/sb be made to do）

④要及時(shí)做好一切準(zhǔn)備很難。 （動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)）

佳作賞析2

Dear Sir or Madam,

I'm Li Hua, a senior three student from China. Yesterday I happened to read①an advertisement from a website,saying that the University of Oxford will hold a summer camp②. I am interested in participating in③it.

As a high school student, I'm good at English and would like to make friends with teenagers around the world.The camp provides a good chance for me, where I can know more about other countries, and in turn tell foreign friends something about China④. Besides, I can get my English greatly improved⑤by communicating with foreign people.

I do hope that I can be admitted to the camp.⑥Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,Li Hua

亮點(diǎn)評(píng)析

①sb happened to do...是英語(yǔ)的常用句式，純正、地道。

②現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)saying that...作定語(yǔ)，其中的that引導(dǎo)一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句。

③participate in是表示“參加；參與”的經(jīng)典短語(yǔ)。

④where 引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，使語(yǔ)言表達(dá)多樣化。

⑤“動(dòng)詞+賓語(yǔ)+賓補(bǔ)”結(jié)構(gòu)使文章的表達(dá)靈動(dòng)、活潑。

⑥do hope是強(qiáng)調(diào)句型的一種，表達(dá)了作者的強(qiáng)烈愿望；be admitted to是表達(dá)“被允許加入”的常用短語(yǔ)。

佳句仿寫(xiě)2

①我昨天在回家的路上碰巧遇到他。 (sb happened to do)

②那天同我們講話(huà)的人去國(guó)外了。 （現(xiàn)在分詞作定語(yǔ)）

③我們要去武當(dāng)山參加太極夏令營(yíng)。 （participate in）

④我們首先參觀了校園，在那里我們對(duì)這所大學(xué)有了一個(gè)大致的了解。 （where引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）

※寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)

【命題分析】

本題采用了近年高考常用的應(yīng)用文體裁，要求寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)參加夏令營(yíng)的郵件，屬于英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)中申請(qǐng)信的范疇。 寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，屬于提綱類(lèi)作文。

該試題既考查考生對(duì)英語(yǔ)的實(shí)際運(yùn)用能力，又考查考生對(duì)文化交流的理解。 本話(huà)題和體裁與考生的生活和學(xué)習(xí)緊密相關(guān)，實(shí)用性很強(qiáng)。 考生可以用和生活、學(xué)習(xí)密切相關(guān)的詞匯，運(yùn)用合適的寫(xiě)作技巧完成該作文。 因?yàn)楸敬蔚膶?xiě)作任務(wù)是寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信，文章的時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)為主，人稱(chēng)要用第一人稱(chēng)。

【寫(xiě)作導(dǎo)圖】

【經(jīng)典模版】

模版范文

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Li Hua, who is a Chinese student taking a summer course in London now. Knowing your art gallery will hold a Chinese painting exhibition and needs some volunteers, I'm writing to apply for the volunteer job.

As a Chinese, I'm interested in Chinese paintings and have a good knowledge of them. Meanwhile, I have studied English for 10 years, which makes my spoken English fluent. I can communicate very well with native English speakers. Besides, I'm so friendly and outgoing that I can easily get along well with the visitors.

If offered the chance, I wouldn't make you disappointed.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.Yours sincerely,Li Hua

【必備詞匯】

apply for 申請(qǐng) application 申請(qǐng)

advertisement 廣告 on the Internet 在網(wǎng)上

advantage 優(yōu)勢(shì) healthy and hard-working 健康且勤勞的

have a good knowledge of 通曉；精通 have no difficulty in 在……方面沒(méi)有困難

communicate with 溝通；交流 outgoing and optimistic 開(kāi)朗且樂(lè)觀的

get along well with 與……相處融洽 position 位置；職位

summer camp 夏令營(yíng) show great interest in 對(duì)……表現(xiàn)出極大的興趣

appealing 有吸引力的 be suitable for 適合……的

be qualified for 有……資格 good personality 良好的性格

independent 獨(dú)立的 be of great use 很有用

opportunity/chance 機(jī)會(huì) grateful 感激的；感謝的

live up to 不辜負(fù) expectation 期待

look forward to 盼望；期待 take...into consideration 考慮到……

【提分靚句】

◎?qū)懶拍康?/p>

I'm writing to apply for a position in your summer camp.

我寫(xiě)信來(lái)申請(qǐng)你們夏令營(yíng)的一個(gè)職位。

I'm writing to tell you that I'm suitable for the job you are advertising for.

我寫(xiě)信是想告訴您我很適合您征聘的這份工作。

The ad is really very appealing to me, so I'm now writing to you in the hope of filling in the job vacancy.

這則廣告非常吸引我，所以我寫(xiě)信給您，希望能夠填補(bǔ)這個(gè)職位的空缺。

I would like to apply for it during this summer vacation because I think it is very useful to me.

我想在這個(gè)暑假期間申請(qǐng)這個(gè)職位，因?yàn)槲艺J(rèn)為它對(duì)我很有用。

I think it's of great use to me. For one thing, I can gain some experience for my future job; for another, I can make more friends.

我認(rèn)為它對(duì)我是很有用的。 一方面，我能夠?yàn)槲磥?lái)的工作積累一些經(jīng)驗(yàn)；另一方面，我可以交到更多的朋友。

◎個(gè)人優(yōu)勢(shì)

The following are my advantages.

以下是我的優(yōu)勢(shì)。

I have my advantages to be a member of your team.

我有我自己的優(yōu)勢(shì)，能成為你們團(tuán)隊(duì)的一員。

In the first place, I have strong writing and communication skills.

首先，我有很好的寫(xiě)作和交流技巧。

Last but not least, I have good personality, and I am independent in life.

最后但也是很重要的一點(diǎn)，我的性格很好，并且我在生活中很獨(dú)立。

I have teamwork spirit and can get on well with other people.

我有團(tuán)隊(duì)精神，能與他人相處得很好。

◎希望獲批

I'd appreciate it if you could give me the opportunity.

如果您能給我這個(gè)機(jī)會(huì)，我將非常感激。

I will be much grateful if you can give me the opportunity.

如果您能給我這個(gè)機(jī)會(huì)，我會(huì)非常感激。

◎表達(dá)期待

I sincerely hope that my application could be favorably considered.

我真誠(chéng)地希望我的申請(qǐng)能被積極地考慮。

I am sure that I can perfectly live up to your expectations.

我確信我能夠很好地達(dá)到你們的期望。

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

期待早日收到您的來(lái)信。

※即時(shí)訓(xùn)練

假定你是李華，在澳大利亞悉尼做交換生期間，得知該城市會(huì)展中心近日將舉辦中國(guó)絲綢展，需要志愿者講解。 請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一封信，申請(qǐng)做志愿者。 內(nèi)容包括：

1. 寫(xiě)信目的；

2. 你的特長(zhǎng)；

3. 表達(dá)期待。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)80左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

參考詞匯：悉尼國(guó)際會(huì)展中心Sydney Convention and Exhibition Center

Dear Sir/Madam,

Yours,Li Hua