胡端楠

【題目要求】

你的英國筆友想了解你最喜愛的中國節(jié)日——春節(jié)。請(qǐng)你結(jié)合下列提問，介紹一下這個(gè)節(jié)日，約100詞。

1.When is it？? 2. What do people eat and do？? 3. Why do you like it so much？

【學(xué)生習(xí)作】

Today， let me introduce my favorite Chinese festival， the Spring Festival.

Its celebrated from January 1 to January 15 in the lunar calendar. During this festival， almost everyone goes back where they are from. We always eat a big dinner with all of our family members and enjoy ourselves.

Its my favorite festival because I can buy new clothes， eat many snacks and get red envelopes from the elders. I can also play happily without homework or exams.

In a word， the Spring Festival is a symbol of reunion and warm in every Chinese heart. Thats why I like the Spring Festival best.

【教師點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本文用“總—分—總”的模式進(jìn)行寫作：第一段點(diǎn)題開篇，說明小作者最愛的節(jié)日是春節(jié);第二段介紹春節(jié)的時(shí)間和人們的活動(dòng);第三段說明自己喜愛春節(jié)的原因;第四段是春節(jié)給人們帶來的感受，總結(jié)全文。

行文中使用了elders和reunion等高級(jí)單詞，with all of our family members、without homework or exams、in a word等短語，以及由where引導(dǎo)的地點(diǎn)狀語從句、被動(dòng)語態(tài)句、why引導(dǎo)的表語從句和that引導(dǎo)的定語從句等。總之，作者語言功底較好。

【完善建議】

1.第三段首句的It最好換成The Spring Festival，因?yàn)镮t離它所指代的首段中的the Spring Festival太遠(yuǎn)。

2.第三段中的“because I can buy...”可換成“because I can always buy...”，這樣就突出了這是春節(jié)的風(fēng)俗習(xí)慣。

（指導(dǎo)教師：金家軍）