姜經(jīng)志 男，中學(xué)英語高級教師，省級骨干教師，淮北市優(yōu)秀教師，中國外語學(xué)習(xí)學(xué)研究會會員，《學(xué)英語》《英語周報》特約編輯。多年來，在省級以上報刊發(fā)表文章800余篇，并有多篇論文獲獎。曾主編《初中生英語滿分作文大全》《英語奧林匹克》《新目標(biāo)英語八年級暑假作業(yè)》;參編《高中英語知識點(diǎn)反饋與閱讀》《初中英語題典大全》《21世紀(jì)英語學(xué)習(xí)指南》《初中英語新作文》《中學(xué)生英語水平測試》等10余冊;輔導(dǎo)學(xué)生30余人次在國家和省級英語競賽中獲獎。

My English Teacher

Hello， everyone！My name is Zhu Lei. Im in Baishan Middle School. Im in Class Three， Grade Seven. All of my classmates and I like one of our teachers very much. She is friendly to us. We all like having her class. Do you know her？ Can you guess who is she①？ Oh， shes my English teacher—Zhang Ling. We often call her “Miss Zhang”. Now， let me introduce Miss Zhang for② you.

She is neither too tall nor too short. She is thin. She has short hair because short hair is in fashion now. She has two big eyes and a small nose. She often wears red clothes.

Miss Zhang is good to③ singing. She can also plays④ the piano very well. She told us she could play the piano when she was eight years old.

She looks very cool.? She is very kind to us. In class， she is like our mother. She often reads short or long stories to us in English. From these， we cannt⑤ only increase our interests in English， but also extend our vocabularies. It is really good for us.

After class she has many things to do. There are always many exercises books on her desk. She will correct them for us. So her daily life is very busy. We learn from her that “No pains， no gains.” But sometimes she plays games with us.

This is our English teacher， a good teacher. We all like her very much.

安徽省濉溪縣百善中心學(xué)校七（3）班 朱蕾

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

小作者全面刻畫了英語老師的肖像，突出了老師的性格特點(diǎn)和敬業(yè)精神，用詞準(zhǔn)確、表達(dá)生動，引用老師的座右銘起到了畫龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①is she應(yīng)改為she is。賓語從句應(yīng)用陳述語序，即主語在前，謂語在后。

②for應(yīng)改為to?！跋蚰橙私榻B某人”應(yīng)用introduce sb. to sb.，介詞必須用to。

③to應(yīng)改為at。表示“擅長……”應(yīng)用be good at。be good to sb. 則表示“對某人好”的意思。

④plays應(yīng)改為play。can是情態(tài)動詞，后面應(yīng)接動詞原形。

⑤cannt應(yīng)改為can not 或cant。can not可以縮寫成cant，但不能縮寫為cannt。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分25分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得22分。