主" 持" 人：謝建民（正高級(jí)教師，江蘇省特級(jí)教師）

本期撰稿：江蘇省無(wú)錫市謝建民名師工作室成員杜曉鶯（無(wú)錫市塔影中學(xué)）

Li Bai holds a wine cup in his hand， while Du Fu sits in front of a desk， writing poems. It’s not that we have travelled to the past. Modern technology has brought them “back to life”.

The two great poets， along with other humanoid robots， wеrе presented at the World Robot Conference 2023 in Beijing in late August. They looked similar to real human beings.

Their skin was made of medical-grade bionic silicone（仿生硅膠）， which was why the skin looked soft and veins could be seen through it.

Researchers are also trying hard to create other features of humans on robots. A US robotics startup named Apptronik brought out its humanoid robot called Apollo on Aug 23. Apollo has around 30 muscles（肌肉）.

However， humans have around 300 muscles in our bodies. For now， engineers can only simplify the muscles to enable basic movements like holding objects and walking.

The robot also contains cameras and sensors（傳感器）in its head， helping it map out a 360-degree view of its environment. They also help the robot keep balance when walking on uncertain surfaces.

Nowadays， bionic human-like robots mostly work with humans as guides and receptionists. There are also robots that share the work of nurses， such as handing out medicine.

As more humanoid robots come out， ensuring their safety will be the key， according to the Robot Report website. When a 70-kilogram robot breaks down and falls， humans nearby may be hurt.

1. Why are Li Bai and Du Fu mentioned at the beginning of the passage？

2. What does the writer think of humanoid robots according to the passage？

科技以人為本，隨著時(shí)代的發(fā)展和科技的進(jìn)步，機(jī)器人開(kāi)始走入我們的生活。你們學(xué)校即將舉辦主題為 “My Dream Robot” 的英語(yǔ)演講比賽。假如你叫李華，請(qǐng)完成一篇演講稿，介紹你夢(mèng)想擁有機(jī)器人的原因、機(jī)器人的類型和功能等。

With the changes of the time， intelligent robots are becoming a part of our lives. In my dreams， I want to own a medical robot.

The medical robot looks similar to the normal people， with a pair of bright eyes and a common body like humans’. Moreover， it can think like an experienced doctor and provide the doctor with useful suggestions. It can follow a doctor’s orders too. There are a great number of medical cases in its “brain”. It also has sensors in its eyes that can send X-rays images. The robot could not only always pay all attention to the patient’s condition but also help the doctor to save more lives. It can be set up next to the patients in the ICU and provide real-time rescue. Time is life. It’s necessary to hold the each second to help the patient fight against the diseases.

In the future， I hope that such a robot can greatly improve people’s medical level and quality of life.

文章體裁是演講稿，開(kāi)頭需要簡(jiǎn)單的寒暄，并呈現(xiàn)演講話題。

文章主體部分雖然詳細(xì)介紹了機(jī)器人的類型和功能，但基本沒(méi)有闡述夢(mèng)想擁有這種機(jī)器人的原因。此外，介紹機(jī)器人的功能時(shí)，缺乏清晰的條理，部分內(nèi)容重復(fù)或顛倒。建議分成三到四個(gè)層次，功能從弱到強(qiáng)，并加入恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，以保證邏輯嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，行文連貫。

畫線語(yǔ)句“set up”“real-time rescue”和“hold the each second”不符合英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣，應(yīng)避免中式英語(yǔ)思維。

演講稿最后要加上結(jié)束語(yǔ)和感謝語(yǔ)。

Good morning！ I’m Li Hua. It’s my great honour to be here to talk about “My Dream Robot”.

With the rapid development of modern technology， robots are widely used in our daily life， such as housekeeping robots， robotic waiters， tour guides and so on. For me， I dream of having a medical robot to look after my grandma， who lives alone in the village.

My dream robot looks similar to a human， with a lovely face and a good temper. Whenever grandma feels lonely， the robot will chat with her and always keep patient. Moreover， it stores a great number of medical cases and acts like an experienced doctor. Therefore， it can offer useful healthcare advice and cure common diseases like flu as well. Finally， the robot contains cameras， sensors and communication devices in its body， helping it pay attention to grandma’s physical conditions at all times. In case of dangerous situations， it will call 120 at once and provide patients with first-aid treatment.

As we know， China is entering the aging society. I believe such a medical robot can greatly improve the life quality of the elderly people.

That’s all， thank you！

升格后的作文結(jié)構(gòu)完整，首尾呼應(yīng)，渾然一體。主體部分分成兩段，首先介紹了當(dāng)下機(jī)器人在民生方面的發(fā)展和運(yùn)用，引出小作者夢(mèng)想擁有的機(jī)器人類型和直接原因；然后聯(lián)系自己的實(shí)際需要，闡述希望機(jī)器人擁有的三大功能和原因，靈活運(yùn)用各種句型和關(guān)聯(lián)詞論述自己的想法。結(jié)束段落中提到“中國(guó)步入老齡化社會(huì)”是個(gè)亮點(diǎn)，從個(gè)體聯(lián)系到整個(gè)社會(huì)，主題得以進(jìn)一步升華。