Hello， boys and girls. Now let me tell you something about me and I favorite teacher. My name is Wang Feng. I’m 12. My birthday is on May 6th. Ibest like red于. I like eating vegetables. I love playing basketball. My favoritesubject is math. My classes start at 8 a.m. I go home at 6 p.m. On Friday， I havean art lesson for two hours after school.

My favorite teacher is Miss Li. She is 26. Her birthday is on March 2nd.Her favorite color is black. She likes fruit. She likes playing tennis. She likesEnglish and she is our English teacher. She goes to school at 7：30 a.m. Shegoes home at 6：30 p.m. She plays tennis for an hour every evening. I like her.She is interesting. Her classes are relaxing.

湖北省襄陽市東津新區(qū)金源中學(xué)張家寶

優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文作者做了自我介紹并描繪了一位教師，表達(dá)了對(duì)這位教師的敬愛之情。全文語言表達(dá)簡(jiǎn)潔流暢；文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整、邏輯清晰，是一篇合格的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

需要修改的地方院

①I 改為my。名詞前面應(yīng)使用所有格my 來表達(dá)個(gè)人所屬。

②I best like red.改為My favorite color is red.表達(dá)“最喜歡的……”用favorite。

③I like her. She is interesting. Her classes are relaxing.改為I like her becauseshe is interesting and her classes are relaxing.使用連接詞讓表達(dá)更有邏輯性。

評(píng)分院

按中考英語作文滿分15 分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得13 分。