楊秋菊
我們生活在一個多彩的校園中,每天我們要接觸我們的同學(xué)。因此,與同學(xué)之間有一種融洽的關(guān)系是非常必要的。你可以真誠地對待他們,熱心地幫助他們,向他們展示你積極向上的風(fēng)貌來影響他們。作為中學(xué)生,請你圍繞著如何與同學(xué)相處這個話題展開思路談?wù)勀愕南敕ā?/p>
OW TO GET ALONG WELL WITH CLASSMATES
9年2班 張樂宇
If we are sunflowers, classmates will be sunshine in our life. Sunflowers can get along well with sunshine. But as a middle school student, how can we get along well with classmates? These are my suggestions.
On the one hand, smile a lot. When we often smile to them, they will love us better. Because they may think you are an outgoing person. You may be easy to get along. On the other hand, be helpful. Everyone likes helpful people around the world. If you are helpful, youll be popular in your life. Your life will be more and more meaningful. Finally, be honest. If you often tell lies, nobody will like you. As the saying goes, “A word spoken is past recalling.” So if you want to have a friendly relationship with others, you will be honest.
You can follow these steps, to learn how to get along well with classmates. When we get along well with many people, we will be much happier. So dont wait. Lets do something to make all of our classmates to be our friends.
本篇文章主題鮮明,結(jié)構(gòu)合理,內(nèi)容清楚,層次分明,字?jǐn)?shù)適中,能夠緊緊圍繞主題“如何與同學(xué)相處”展開說明。
文章開頭運(yùn)用比喻式開頭,把我們比喻成太陽花,把同學(xué)們比喻成陽光。進(jìn)而引出了我們與同學(xué)們的關(guān)系是要融洽相處的。從開始就吸引了讀者的注意力。
第二段運(yùn)用了on the one hand, on the other hand, finally作為主題句前的提示詞使得文章條理很清晰。運(yùn)用了多種的說明方法,使說明的道理通俗易懂。此外,作者還引用了名言“覆水難收”來說明要誠實(shí)對人的道理。
第三段緊緊扣著主題,并升華了主題。并呼吁人們不要等待,與同學(xué)們友好相處。
HOW TO GET ALONG WELL WITH CLASSMATES
9年2班 陰雨晴
better relationship can make our life colorful. As a middle school student, we will be with our classmates every day. How to get along well with them? I have some suggestions.
First, you need to help our classmates. Everyone likes making friends with someone who helps others. If you feel like getting along well with them, youd better help the people around you and show your love. Second, you need to understand classmates who get angry. When meeting the situations, you can give them courage. If you do like this, I believe you will get along well with them. Third, you need to show your kindness and smiles. It can make them believe in you and share their happiness and sadness with you. Your life will be colorful.
As long as you follow the words mentioned above, you can find it easy to get along well with others. Now, show your determination and get along well with others.
本篇作文是圍繞著主題“如何與同學(xué)相處”進(jìn)行書寫的說明文,通篇符合說明文的特點(diǎn)。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰合理,內(nèi)容具體清楚,層次分明。作者運(yùn)用語言的能力很強(qiáng),能夠恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂酶鞣N短語,廣泛地運(yùn)用各種句式,如狀語從句、定語從句等,文章中長短句相結(jié)合,使文章更具可讀性。
(作者單位:哈爾濱市第三十六中學(xué))endprint