姜經(jīng)志

Today is March 12th. It is Planting Tree Day①. There were no classes this morning. The all② teachers and students went to plant trees along the road in front of our school.

We went there by bike. As soon as we got there， we began working. First， Mr. Wang， our head teacher asked us to dig holes. The holes must be enough large③ for the trees. After a short time， a truck came. There were many young trees on it. Some students put the young trees in the holes. Other students watered the young trees. What④ hard we worked！

“Trees are our friends. They will make our hometown more beautifully⑤，” I thought. Although I was very tired， I still felt quite happy.

安徽省濉溪縣四鋪中心學(xué)校七（4）班 侯夢(mèng)婷

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文真實(shí)地記錄了小作者的植樹(shù)經(jīng)歷。全文既有熱火朝天的勞動(dòng)場(chǎng)面的描寫(xiě)，又有個(gè)人的心理感受的描寫(xiě)。難能可貴的是，小作者學(xué)以致用，運(yùn)用了自己學(xué)過(guò)的多種句型，使得文章生動(dòng)、流暢。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①Planting Tree Day 應(yīng)改為T(mén)ree Planting Day。植樹(shù)節(jié)是專(zhuān)有名詞，應(yīng)為T(mén)ree Planting Day。

②The all應(yīng)改為All the。all 修飾名詞時(shí)，如果名詞前有定冠詞，all應(yīng)置于定冠詞之前。

③enough large應(yīng)改為large enough。enough 修飾形容詞或副詞時(shí)，要放在這些詞的后面。

④What應(yīng)改為How。若感嘆句的中心詞是形容詞或副詞，句首應(yīng)用how。

⑤beautifully應(yīng)改為beautiful。此處應(yīng)用形容詞作賓語(yǔ)補(bǔ)足語(yǔ)。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分20分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得17分。