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通過(guò)2016年普通高考評(píng)卷英語(yǔ)作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的評(píng)分總則可知，一篇高分英語(yǔ)作文要符合以下三點(diǎn)：應(yīng)用了較豐富的句式結(jié)構(gòu)、高級(jí)詞匯和作為串珠紅線的連接成分。本文將從以上三個(gè)方面幫助同學(xué)們打造高分作文，希望對(duì)大家有所幫助。

[多樣化的句式結(jié)構(gòu)]

要使所寫的文章凸顯文采，顯示綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力，同學(xué)們就應(yīng)運(yùn)用復(fù)雜多樣的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，盡量避免使用結(jié)構(gòu)單一、長(zhǎng)度相同的單句。

1. 使用定語(yǔ)從句

（2016·天津卷） Two weeks have passed since you came to our school for the exchange program which we all benefited from.

（2015·安徽卷） The person I would like to interview is Yang Liwei.

（2015·陜西卷） Successfully， I have lent a helping hand to her in several English activities of my class， which have been appreciated by both teachers and classmates.

2. 使用名詞性從句

（2016·四川卷） Of course， there are many other reasons to explain why Im so excited about the spring.

（2015·四川卷） And you also should keep it in mind that comparing notes with your classmates frequently is a good way to improve your study.

（2015·安徽卷） If I could interview him， I would ask him what made him an astronaut and how he was trained.

3. 使用狀語(yǔ)從句

（2016·江蘇卷） Things will turn for the better if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey.

（2015·全國(guó)卷Ⅰ） You can write anything relevant so long as its interesting and informative.

（2015·陜西卷）Besides， I have such a good command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher.

4. 使用并列句

（2016·江蘇卷） On-line voting becomes increasingly popular， and many competitions get people involved in it.

（2015·江蘇卷） It not only affects our everyday life， but may also threaten peoples lives.

（2015·安徽卷） I have long been interested in space exploration and I believe I could learn a great deal from him about it.

（2015·浙江卷） Most of my classmates wanted to go to a park while I had an idea of going to a nicer place.

5. 使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句

（2015·福建卷） It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts.

（2015·江蘇卷） It is the people who obey the rules that matter.

6. 使用倒裝句

（2013·廣東卷） Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful.

（2013·湖北卷） Not until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative ways.

7. 使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)

（2015·福建卷） In the picture， we can see a boy in worn clothes， sitting at a shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it.

（2015·湖南卷） Hearing what the head teacher said， I was more than glad and my heart beat wildly.

8. 使用被動(dòng)句

（2016·北京卷） A week before Earth Day， posters were put up around our school， calling upon us to join in the actions for a greener earth.

（2015·湖南卷） The other day， I was praised by my head teacher at the class meeting because I recited all the words of Unit 3.

[彰顯個(gè)性的高級(jí)詞匯]

如果想讓自己寫的文章與眾不同，吸引閱卷人的眼球，除了少犯錯(cuò)誤，使用復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)的句子外，還要在遣詞造句上下功夫。有以下原則可以遵循：

1. 晚詞優(yōu)先

閱卷老師偏愛(ài)“學(xué)得晚”的單詞，因?yàn)槭褂脤W(xué)得比較晚的單詞，可以體現(xiàn)一個(gè)人“學(xué)以致用”的意識(shí)。在寫作時(shí)盡量使用七、八級(jí)詞匯。如：

2. 短語(yǔ)優(yōu)先

在閱卷老師看來(lái)，活用短語(yǔ)是一個(gè)考生能力的體現(xiàn)。因此，我們可以掌握一些將某些常見(jiàn)單詞轉(zhuǎn)化為短語(yǔ)的用法。如：

3. “具體化”單詞優(yōu)先

請(qǐng)對(duì)比以下句子：

①go to school everyday.

②ride to school everyday.

很多同學(xué)都能感覺(jué)到②要比①好。究其原因，是②中的ride比①中的go更加具體：go只表達(dá)了“去”的意思，而ride不但表達(dá)出“去”的意思，還能表達(dá)出具體的交通方式。

③Wang is a good teacher.

④Mr. Wang is a kind， patient and knowledgeable teacher.

③只表達(dá)出Mr. Wang是一個(gè)“好”老師，而到底“好”在哪些方面，卻沒(méi)有具體說(shuō)清楚；④則清楚地告訴讀者，Mr. Wang好在三個(gè)方面：和藹（kind）、耐心（patient）以及知識(shí)豐富（knowledgeable）。因此，我們要學(xué)會(huì)換用更為具體的單詞來(lái)表達(dá)。

[作為串珠紅線的連接詞]

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)把上下文連貫專門提出來(lái)，可見(jiàn)恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂眠B接詞非常重要。我們應(yīng)該根據(jù)所寫文章的內(nèi)容，按時(shí)間順序、空間順序、邏輯關(guān)系、前因后果等來(lái)組織所寫內(nèi)容之間的關(guān)系。不一定要按照作文題目中的提示順序來(lái)組篇，可以適當(dāng)調(diào)整，然后加入構(gòu)成語(yǔ)篇紐帶的過(guò)渡語(yǔ)串句成文，從而使所寫的文章層次清晰，邏輯分明。

熟記以下語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，在寫作時(shí)，依據(jù)所寫內(nèi)容，恰當(dāng)使用連接詞，這樣才能使你所寫的文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊、邏輯清晰。

（2016·全國(guó)卷Ⅰ） Moreover， by doing the part-time job I can get some precious experience so that I can better adapt to the development and changes of society.

（2015·北京卷） First， he showed us the basic steps and skills of making dough figurines. We stood around him and watched attentively. Then we started to have a try ourselves. The old man walked around and helped us patiently.

Finally， we put the figurines we made on the table and took pictures with the old craftsman. Looking at the figurines， we were all very excited.

（2015·廣東卷） Thus， I urge to make a rule which says Learn from each other， hoping that they will learn more knowledge and make more friends by helping each other.

（2015·江蘇卷） Quite a few things give rise to the traffic problem. In spite of the large-scale construction of roads and highways， there is still much room for improvement， because of the ever increasing number of cars these years. Whats worse， some drivers， cyclists and pedestrians do not think it vital to obey traffic rules.

總之，一篇文章如果書寫美觀、語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確、內(nèi)容完整，而且使用了較多的高檔句式和詞匯，行文流暢，就一定能贏得閱卷老師的青睞，獲得理想的分?jǐn)?shù)。

鏈 接

2016年全國(guó)卷Ⅰ高分作文

Dear Ms Jenkins，

Im writing to ask you for help. Im applying for a part-time job in an overseas-funded corporation. I think itll be a new challenge to me. Besides， I can obtain some precious experience from the part-time job， which also makes me better adapt to the development and changes of society.

Ive already written the application and resume. But Im afraid that there are some mistakes about the words and format. Therefore， I have to put you to trouble by correcting my mistakes in the material I attach to the letter. Id be very grateful if you could do me a favor.

Sincerely yours，

Li Hua