江蘇省淮安市洪澤實驗小學(xué)四（7）班 袁 懿

My name is Yuan Yi.I have a happy family.It is a small one.They are my mother，my father and me.My mother is a teacher.She teaches English very well.My father is an office worker.He is very humourous.He often tells us funny stories.He works hard，too.My parents set a good example to me.So I’m strict with myself at school.I put all my effort into study.I love my family very much.

【點評】

小作者通過簡單介紹自己父母的工作，讓讀者了解她的家庭，以及家庭環(huán)境對她的影響，全文語言流暢，內(nèi)容深刻，過渡自然，是一篇佳作。