禹曉月 湖南長(zhǎng)沙市中南大學(xué)第二附屬中學(xué) 八年級(jí)

最喜歡的英語(yǔ)格言：No cross， no crown.不經(jīng)歷風(fēng)雨，怎能見(jiàn)彩虹？

習(xí)作：

When I was a child， I had no idea what the homeland meant. I just knew that I lived in a place where there was no war but peace and happiness. However， I didnt know how many soldiers had lost their lives to defend our motherland and how much pain she had in her memory.

Now， as a teenager in the 21st century， I am proud of being a Chinese student！ Many years ago，my motherland was deeply hurt by the enemies， and she was in danger of being destroyed. But Chinese people never gave in and they fought against the enemies bravely！ Chinese people have proved themselves. Gone is the name of “the sick man of East Asia” ， forever. Now we are getting stronger and stronger.

I love my homeland！ Nowadays， we have safe society and beautiful environment. We Chinese teenagers should study hard and try our best to shoulder our responsibilities for our homeland.

I love my homeland！ I love China！

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

作者以自己的成長(zhǎng)為背景，回顧祖國(guó)的歷史，描繪祖國(guó)的現(xiàn)狀，表達(dá)了自己對(duì)祖國(guó)的熱愛(ài)。高級(jí)詞匯、短語(yǔ)和句型的使用是寫(xiě)作的亮點(diǎn)，如“a place where there was no war but peace and happiness， give in， shoulder ones responsibilities， fight against”等。

（指導(dǎo)老師：劉玉立）

趙 茹 山東新泰市禹村中學(xué) 九年級(jí)

最喜歡的英語(yǔ)格言：You cannot improve your past， but you can improve your future.你不能改變你的過(guò)去，但你仍能改善你的未來(lái)。

習(xí)作：

There are many countries in the world， but I love my country best. China is my greatest motherland. Since the day I was born， I began to have a proud name： Chinese. Im so proud that Ive got the beautiful yellow skin， black eyes and black hair. Im also proud that I speak Chinese which is the most beautiful language in my heart.

China has more than five thousand years history， and it is one of the biggest countries in the world. Every time I talk about Chinese culture to the foreign people， they speak highly of it.

You know， the capital of China is Beijing. There are so many beautiful places of interest there， including the Imperial Palace， Tiananmen Square， the Great Wall and so on. Also， the food is delicious and Chinese people are friendly.

In a word， China is such a beautiful country that I love it very much.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

作者先用“China is my greatest motherland”明確觀點(diǎn)，然后闡述祖國(guó)的悠久歷史與豐富多樣的文化，并以受到外國(guó)友人的高度贊揚(yáng)而感到驕傲，拳拳之心、殷殷之情溢于言表。在闡述緣由時(shí)，用到了“including”及“also”等詞匯，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，思路清晰。

（指導(dǎo)老師：王 普）

羅雨薇 湖南長(zhǎng)沙市明德華興中學(xué) 九年級(jí)

最喜歡的英語(yǔ)格言：Everything worth doing is worth doing well. 一切值得去做的事情都值得做好。

習(xí)作：

Homeland is the best place for everybody， including me. I live in ChangSha（長(zhǎng)沙）， which is known to people in China as the city of beautiful scenery， it is also well known for its history. As for me， ChangSha has left many sweet and soft memories in my heart.

ChangSha is the capital of Hunan Province， it receives a lot of visitors every year because of its famous historical places. YueLu mountain is the best example of this. When you climb to the top of the mountain， fresh air will fill your chest， and this will make you feel relaxed and comfortable. But that is just one of the reasons I love ChangSha.

Another reason is that ChangSha people are warm-hearted and friendly. In fact， people in ChangSha can talk wherever they are， even on buses. They often invite people to their homes and taste the food which they cook themselves.

All in all， ChangSha not only carries my childhood memories， but also represents Chinas wonderful culture and natural beauty. And this is my homeland which I deeply love.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

作為一名土生土長(zhǎng)的長(zhǎng)沙人，作者細(xì)數(shù)了自己熱愛(ài)家鄉(xiāng)的原因。最后一段，用“All in all”句型作總結(jié)，邏輯清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。 （指導(dǎo)老師：徐 京）

趙 剛 山東安丘市東城雙語(yǔ)實(shí)驗(yàn)學(xué)校 九年級(jí)

最喜歡的英語(yǔ)格言：Cultivated in minutes， in small gain. 耕耘于分秒，收獲于細(xì)微。

習(xí)作：

My hometown is Weifang（濰坊）. It is located in the middle of Shandong Peninsula. Its a beautiful city with a long history. A number of famous people came from our city， such as Jia Sixie（賈思勰）， Zhang Zeduan（張擇端）， Liu Yong（劉墉） and so on.

There are lots of beautiful mountains， rivers， lakes and ancient villages. Weifang is also famous for its kites and is known as the “International Kite Capital”.

Now transport has become more convenient. There are airports， highways， high-speed railway stations and railway stations in Weifang.Every year，thousands of people from China and other countries come to visit our city.

People of our city are all hard working. Though they are having a rich and good life， they are still working hard to build their city into a modern one.

Its a beautiful city， isnt it？ Are you attracted by it？

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

作者用“Though”句型表達(dá)人們的進(jìn)取精神；用反義疑問(wèn)句“Its a beautiful city， isnt it？”增強(qiáng)思想感情。 （指導(dǎo)老師：劉樹(shù)春）

劉 璐 山東安丘市東城雙語(yǔ)實(shí)驗(yàn)學(xué)校 九年級(jí)

最喜歡的英語(yǔ)格言：Difficult is a piece of stone， it is a stumbling block to the weak， for it is a stepping stone to the strong. 困難是一塊頑石，對(duì)于弱者它是絆腳石，對(duì)于強(qiáng)者它是墊腳石。

習(xí)作：

This summer vacation， I went back to my home village， JingZhi（景芝）. I was so surprised that great changes have taken place in recent years.

In old times， the villagers had a hard life. There used to be old and low houses on the streets. There wasnt convenient traffic and the children had to walk a long way to school.

Today， the villagers are living a happy life. High buildings can be seen everywhere. More and more people have bought their own computers， mobiles and even private cars！ Children can also get very good education. In addition， the environment has become more beautiful. The sky is bluer， the water is clearer， the roads are wider and the trees are greener.

Thanks to our government for building new countries for us， great changes will lead us to have a better life.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

作者用“used to”句型介紹過(guò)去的狀況；插入語(yǔ)“In addition”使文章過(guò)渡自然；最后用“Thanks to”句型闡明觀點(diǎn)，用法準(zhǔn)確、思路清晰。 （指導(dǎo)老師：劉樹(shù)春）