The spirit of Lei Feng is great. It’s very important for us to have the spirit ofLei Feng.

My friend Jim is very kind and helpful. He is always there to help others. Iused to be too shy to speak in front of class. I always kept silent on myself淤.So Ididn’t have any friends. Luckily， Jim tried his best to help me deal with myshyness. He always encouraged me to express myself bravely. What’s more， hetalked about everything I was interested with于. Now I’m more outgoing than I usedto be. I dare talking盂in front of strangers. I will even join the speech competition.

Thanks to my best friend Jim， I have learned Lei Feng’s spirit from him.Now， I always help others in need in my life.

湖北省襄陽市東津新區(qū)金源中學 徐云翔

本期點評名師

任新超 男，湖北省襄陽市東津新區(qū)金源中學優(yōu)秀教師，從事教育工作多年；在省級刊物上發(fā)表過若干篇論文；曾在襄陽廣播電視臺英語新聞欄目擔任播音員；曾獲得湖北省微課比賽三等獎、襄陽市微課一等獎、襄陽市教學能手、襄陽市青教賽三等獎、公開課教學競賽一等獎等榮譽；指導的學生在各類競賽中取得了出色成績，多人獲得省級獎和地市級獎。

點評

優(yōu)點：這篇習作主題明確，圍繞雷鋒精神和個人成長展開，清晰地展示了作者在朋友幫助下的變化，在結尾部分小作者還表達了對雷鋒精神的理解和在日常生活中幫助他人的決心。

需要修改的地方

①on myself 改成by myself。by myself 意為“獨自一人”。

②with 改成in。be interested in 是固定搭配，意為“對……感興趣”。

③talking 改成to talk。dare to do sth.意為“敢做某事”。

評分

按中考英語作文滿分15 分的評分標準，本文修改前可得14 分。