廖英

[試題呈現(xiàn)]

假設(shè)你的名字叫李華，今年18歲，想利用暑假打工，你在報紙上看到了某咖啡廳的招聘廣告。請根據(jù)報紙內(nèi)容寫一封120～150字的求職信。

注意：1. 框內(nèi)為李華個人的相關(guān)信息；

2. 信的開頭已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

[謀篇布局]

求職信屬于公務(wù)信函，其目的在于讓聘用方了解自己的經(jīng)驗、能力、成就以及愿望等，所以對個人情況的介紹應(yīng)該是求職信的核心內(nèi)容。應(yīng)盡可能向?qū)Ψ秸f明本人的長處，以便留下好印象，獲得面談的機會。

求職信一般包括以下幾個方面的內(nèi)容：

首先闡述清楚招聘信息的來源，以及所申請的具體職位；

其次簡述個人信息；然后進(jìn)一步強調(diào)自己的能力，表達(dá)抱負(fù)；

最后提出自己的希望，希望得到面試的機會。

求職信的語言屬于正式用語，在寫作過程中一定要注意用詞簡潔、準(zhǔn)確，語氣禮貌、自信，態(tài)度不卑不亢，所給信息具有充分的可信度。尤其是在強調(diào)自身經(jīng)歷和優(yōu)點的時候，更應(yīng)把握尺度。

[常用表達(dá)]

開頭常用句式

I am writing in response to your advertisement in ...

I would like to apply the vacancy of ...

I am writing this letter to submit my application for ...

I write this letter to apply for the position that you have advertised in ...

I am writing to express my interest in your advertised position for ...

In reply to your advertisement in ... I beg to apply for the post of ... in your company.

Your advertised position of ... interests me ...

I am writing this letter to recommend myself as a qualified candidate for the job of ... you have advertised on ...

結(jié)尾段常用句式

I would be most grateful if you grant me a personal interview.

Any favorable consideration of my application will be highly appreciated.

Your prompt response will be much appreciated.

I should be pleased to attend for an interview at your convenience， when I could give you further details concerning myself.

Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to hearing form you.

I hope I may be granted an interview， when I can explain my qualifications more fully.

其他常用句式

The main reason for my confidence in this position lies in ...

I graduated from ... majoring in ... I have been working in ... since my graduation， and I have therefore attained a fair knowledge and experience in this field.

I have much spare time this semester， which can ensure my time commitment for the job.

The kind of work in which your company is engaged particularly interests me.

I feel I have the necessary qualifications and experience needed for the position for ... advertised in the newspaper.

It seems to me that my working experience， together with my education background， has given me an ideal preparation to assume the role of ... in a firm such as yours.

Please find more details in my enclosed resume.

[參考模板]

寫作“三步走”：

自我介紹，說明求職目的；

展示個人能力、經(jīng)歷及求職動機；

希望得到面試機會、表達(dá)感謝。

Dear Sir or Madam，

I write this letter to apply for the position that you have advertised in _____________ （消息來源） of _____________________ （廣告發(fā)布時間）/In reply to your advertisement on _____________________， Im writing to apply to be ______________________.

Im ________________ from _______________. As a/an _____________， I have been _____________.Besides， I won ______________ in ______________. If you consider me appropriate for the job， please call me at ____________________.

I would appreciate it very much if you could give me an early reply./Thank you for considering my application， and I am looking forward to meeting you.

Yours sincerely，

Li Ming

習(xí)作Ⅰ

Dear sir，

I would like to apply for the position of a part-time waiter， as was advertised in the newspaper.

To briefly introduce myself， I， an eighteen-year-old boy， who saw the wanted you advertised in the newspaper， want to inform you of my advantages. Years of school life have equipped me with excellent communicating skills， which can be of great help to work in the café. Due to the vacation， I have available and adequate time during the week. Furthermore， I have ever worked three months in fast food restaurant， which can cast light on my ability quite well. In addition， I will look as well as I can， dress becomingly， talk low， act good， criticize not one bit to regulate myself.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely，

Li Hua

點評 這是一篇中等習(xí)作。其優(yōu)點是：

1. 層次分明，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，三段各有側(cè)重點，要點齊全。語氣誠懇，不卑不亢。

2. 有一定的詞匯積累，部分表達(dá)選詞恰當(dāng)且高級，如：inform you of my advantages， equip me with excellent communicating skills， be of great help to。

不足之處在于：

在信息來源的表述上第一段和第二段有重復(fù)。

有一定數(shù)量的中式英語表達(dá)，不符合英文表達(dá)邏輯與習(xí)慣。如第二段的最后一句話可修改為In addition， I will dress appropriately and behave politely to be a qualified waiter。

作者嘗試了亮點表達(dá)，但存在個別選詞錯誤與搭配不當(dāng)。如：在表達(dá)“有時間”時，I have available time應(yīng)改為I am available；cast light on意為“闡明”，用在my ability上很生硬，根據(jù)表達(dá)需要可修改為 ...which can indicate my experience accumulation and qualification；在副詞修飾動詞方面，沒有becomingly這個詞；talk low可修改為talk gently；act good可修改為behave politely。

習(xí)作Ⅱ

Dear sir，

I would like to apply for the position of a part-time waiter， as was advertised in the newspaper. My name is Li Hua， a student of 18 years old. Young as I am， I have confidence in myself. Possessed of enormous enthusiasm and determination， I will definitely live up to your expectation. Listed below are my qualifications for the job.

First， It is convenient for me to work in the busy city center café as my home is not far away and I can see to it that I am available during the whole summer vacation. Besides， knowing that enjoying working with people is what it takes to be a waitress in your café， I can meet this demand as I am a friendly and helpful person. Whats more， the previous three months working experience in the KFC is where I am at an advantage， that is to say， I am experienced and know how to attend to sudden circumstances flexibly.

In a word， I guarantee that I am qualified for the job and I will try my best to work if I am employed. I hope I can meet with your approval and hear from you soon.

Yours sincerely，

Li Hua

點評 這是一篇高檔習(xí)作。

1. 段落清晰，層次分明。有過渡銜接詞besides， whats more， in a word，也有過渡銜接句Listed below are my qualifications for the job.

2. 高級詞匯運用自如，作者語用輸出能力強。在詞方面，通過豐富的形容詞和副詞使表達(dá)更形象，如enormous， definitely， available， previous， flexibly， guarantee。在短語方面，動詞和介詞短語交叉使用，如be possessed of， live up to ones expectation， it is convenient for me to， at an advantage， attend to sudden circumstances， be qualified for， meet with your approval。

3. 句式結(jié)構(gòu)豐富多樣，長短句并存。在文章第一段，作者就分別用了as引導(dǎo)的非限定性定語從句和as引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句。此外，我們還可以欣賞到下列高級句式：

Possessed of enormous enthusiasm and determination， I will definitely live up to your expectation. （過去分詞作狀語）

Listed below are my qualifications for the job. （系表結(jié)構(gòu)的完全倒裝）

Knowing that enjoying working with people is what it takes to be a waitress in your café， I can meet this demand as I am a friendly and helpful person. （現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語+what引導(dǎo)的表語從句）

... the previous three months working experience in the KFC is where I am at an advantage. （where引導(dǎo)的表語從句）