江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)九年級(2)班 劉權(quán)基

劉權(quán)基，來自江蘇省連云港市的陽光男孩。他性格開朗，思維活躍，愛好廣泛，學(xué)習(xí)成績優(yōu)異，曾四次獲得學(xué)校獎學(xué)金。他酷愛英語，曾三次獲得“江蘇省中學(xué)生英語風(fēng)采大賽”一等獎。

Computers are becoming more and more useful in our daily life.It’s very important for us to learn how to use computers.Now,I’ll give you some ①advices about using computers.

First,the Internet is playing an important part in our life.On the Internet,we can learn news both at home and abroad.We can also send messages by e-mail,read all kinds of books and learn foreign languages by ourselves.②Except we can enjoy music,watch sports matches and play games.We can go shopping,book tickets for the trains or the p lanes and so on.In a word,the Internet has made our life m ore colorful.

Second,try not to waste much time on computer games.It’s bad for our eyes and we should spend more time③on studying.

Computers are very useful,if you use④it in a good way.

教師點評：

本文采用了“總—分—總”的順序進行寫作，整篇文章條理清晰，語言流暢精練。首先，第一段概述了我們應(yīng)該學(xué)會使用電腦；然后，用兩個自然段從正反兩面說明如何健康合理地使用電腦；最后，在文章的結(jié)尾處用一句話總結(jié)全文。

需完善的內(nèi)容：

①advices改為advice。advice是不可數(shù)名詞。

②Except改為Besides。except意為“（用于所言不包括的人或事物前）除……之外”，besides意為“除……之外（還）”。

③on改為in或直接去掉。spend...(in)doing sth.意為“花費（時間或金錢）做某事”。

④it改為them。代指上文中的復(fù)數(shù)可數(shù)名詞com puters，應(yīng)使用them。