本期點評名師
陳傳光 男,江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)高級教師、連云港市優(yōu)秀教育園丁、江蘇省教育學(xué)會會員,從事教育工作15年:曾獲英語專業(yè)技能大賽市一等獎、班主任基本功大賽市一等獎:有多篇論文在各主流和核心期刊上發(fā)表:曾指導(dǎo)學(xué)生在各類競賽中取得了不錯的成績,有多人獲得省級獎和地市級獎。
How to Get Along with Others
In our daily life, we can't avoid associating with people in the world. so it is importantfor us to know how to get along with others.
In my opinion, to get along with others. we must remember the following advices① First,we need to be honest with others. Telling lies surely makes people stay far away from you.Just as an old saying goes, "Honesty is the best policy." Second, we should be modestenough. If we are proud in public, we can hardly win others② respect. Finally, we shouldn'tbe selfish. We should learn to share.
If we obey the rules which are mentioned above, we will find it much easy③ to get alongwith others.
江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學(xué)九年級(2)班
王政
點評
1.優(yōu)點:
這是一篇表達如何與他人和睦相處的習(xí)作。全文主題突出,結(jié)構(gòu)合理,詳略得當:定語從句、賓語從句、狀語從句等從句的運用體現(xiàn)了作者較強的寫作功底。
2.需要修改的地方:
①advices改為advice。advice意為“建議”,是不可數(shù)名詞。
②others改為others。others意為“其他人的”。
③easy改為easier。much用來修飾比較級。
3.評分:
按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25分的評分標準,本文修改前可得22分。