本期點評名師

陳傳光男，江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學高級教師、連云港市新333工程教學標兵、連云港市優(yōu)秀教育園丁，從事教育教學工作多年；曾獲英語專業(yè)技能大賽市一等獎及班主任基本功大賽市一等獎；有多篇論文在各核心和主流期刊上發(fā)表。

The Most Important Person

Hi， everyone. My name is David. In my life， I think， the most important personis my mom. My mom is forty years old. She is on淤medium height. She has longblack hair. My mom is a teacher in a middle school. She works very hard and herstudents like her very much. She is busy but she spends much time take于care ofme. She too盂helps me with my schoolwork. When I have problems， she will be thefirst one to help. I want to say thanks to her and I love her. My mom is the mostimportant person in my life.

江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學 殷榮章

點評

優(yōu)點：本文介紹了“我”生活中最重要的人———媽媽。文中描述了媽媽的年齡、身高和工作等方面情況，講述了媽媽對“我”的愛和付出，表達了“我”對媽媽的愛。全篇感情真摯，行文連貫，是一篇合格的學生習作。

需要修改的地方：①on 改為of。be of medium height 是固定用法，意為“中等身高”。

②take 改為taking。spend 搭配介詞with，再加上動詞-ing 表示“花時間做某事”。

③too 改為also。句中表示“也……”用also。

評分：按江蘇省連云港市中考英語作文滿分25分的評分標準，本文修改前可得23分。