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要求：運用所學知識描述一位好朋友，語句通順，不少于80詞。

My best friend is Alice. We are in the same class. She is a nice girl. She has big black eyes and a small mouth. She is as tall as me. We both have long black hair. Shes good at dancing. Im more outgoing than her ， but shes more hard-working than me. A friend likes a mirror. When I see her doing homework， I also take out my book to read. Alice often gives me good advice when Im in trouble. Im weak in maths， she often helps me with maths and tells me to do more exercises in time. Now my math is much better than before. A true friend reaches for your hand and touches your heart. Im lucky to own this good friend.

簡評：人人都有好朋友，此文雖為命題作文，但是是一篇貼近學生實際生活，適合中學生表達的記敘文。話題較為輕松、自由，有利于學生的發(fā)揮。題目要求描述一位好朋友，學生可緊緊圍繞此話題， 運用所學形容詞比較級等語言知識從不同方面入筆，如外貌、性格及愛好等將這篇作文寫得豐富而生動。本文語言簡潔，不僅將好朋友的一些特征與自己相對比，而且恰到好處地舉出和好朋友在學習生活中遇到的幾件事例來描述人物，并能夠引用教材中的一些句子，學以致用， 是一篇佳作。

（指導教師：于倩）