翟一聞
My best friend is Tom. Let me tell you something about us.
Im more outgoing than Tom, so I like playing football. He likes reading books. He is taller than me, because he has good eating habits.
We are both in the same school. He is in Class 1 Grade 2. Im in Class 2 Grade 2. He is more handsome than me, but Im smarter than Tom. He reads many books. His favorite book is“The old man and the sea.” He thinks its very good. I like singing. My favorite song is Demons. We both like making friends with teachers. I think friends are like a mirror.
簡(jiǎn)評(píng):
本文是初二學(xué)生的一篇習(xí)作。主要記述了“我”和好朋友的異同點(diǎn),重點(diǎn)是使用比較級(jí)的語句。本文小作者對(duì)比較級(jí)的運(yùn)用較為準(zhǔn)確。文章內(nèi)容的組織略有欠缺,還須進(jìn)一步加強(qiáng)。
指導(dǎo)教師:王磊