Reading 2

I’ll never forget that summer day in 1965 when my mother suddenly died of an unexplained illness at the age of 36. Later that afternoon， a police officer stopped by to ask my father if the hospital could use Mother’s corneas（角膜）. I was shocked. “The doctors want to dissect（解剖） Mum and give her away to other people！” I thought as I ran into the house in tears.

“How can you let them do that to her？” I screamed at my father. “My mum came into this world in one piece and that is how she should go out.”

“Linda，” Father said quietly， putting his arm around me， “the greatest gift you can give is a part of yourself. Your mother and I decided long ago that if we can make a difference in just one person’s life after we die， our death will have meaning.” He went on to explain they had both decided to donate their organs（器官）.

The lesson my father taught me that day became one of the most important in my life.

Years passed. I married and had a family of my own. In 1980， my father became seriously ill and moved in with us. He cheerfully told me that when he died， he wanted me to donate his eyes. “Sight is one of the greatest gifts a person can give，” he said.

I told Wendy what her grandpa had said， and with tears in her eyes， she went into her grandpa’s room and gave him a big hug. She was only fourteen years old—the same age at which I was introduced to such a thing. What a difference！

My father died on April 11，1986， and we donated his eyes as he had wanted. Three days later， Wendy said， “Mum， I’m so proud of you for what you did for Grandpa.”

At that moment， I realized that my father gave much more than his eyes.

Tasks

1. How was it for the writer to agree the hospital’s use of her mother’s corneas？

2. What did Wendy think of her grandpa’s donation？

Writing2

每個人都有自己的生活習慣，養(yǎng)成良好的生活習慣能幫助我們擁有健康的體魄和美好的生活。假如你是李華，你的朋友Andy寫信告知你他要改掉手機游戲沉迷問題。受到他的鼓舞，你也決定改掉一個壞習慣。請結合自身實際，寫一封回信。

原文呈現(xiàn)

I think I spend too much time watching short videos. I even stay up late to watch them.

Without enough sleep， I can’t listen to my teachers in class carefully， so I’ve fallen behind my classmates in some subjects. Looking at the screen for too long does harm to my eyes.

I am planning to spend less time watching short videos. You should spend more time exercising and reading. It will be helpful to your future study and health. Let’s try our best to improve ourselves together.

書信要加上恰當的稱呼和主題句。

段落和各句之間的連接詞運用太少，缺少邏輯性和連貫性。

文章主體部分結構較為合理，小作者陳述問題以及不好的影響，并制訂計劃解決問題。但在最后一段制訂計劃時，人稱使用混亂，要以第一人稱講述自己的計劃。

書信要加上結束語和落款。

升格展示

Dear Andy，

I am so glad to know that you’re considering giving up playing mobile phone games.

To be honest， I think I spend too much time watching short videos. I even stay up late to watch them.

Without enough sleep， I can’t pay full attention to my study in class. As a result， I’ve fallen behind my classmates in some subjects. Moreover， looking at the screen for too long does harm to my eyes.

I am planning to limit my time spent on watching short videos. Instead， I will spend more time exercising and reading. I will manage my free time more wisely to achieve a balance between my study and my life. It will be of great help to my future study and health. Let’s try our best to improve ourselves together.

Yours，

Li Hua

綜合點評

在升格文中，小作者加上了恰當的稱呼語、問候語和結束語，文章結構清晰，內容完整。正文第二段小作者實事求是陳述自身壞習慣——花大量時間刷短視頻，第三段分析了壞習慣帶來的影響，第四段則是制訂合理計劃改掉這個壞習慣。小作者在句子和段落之間增加了不同的連接詞，使全文更加連貫、有邏輯。小作者還對原文中一些表達進行了修飾，如“l(fā)imit my time spent on watching short videos”“manage my free time more wisely to achieve a balance between my study and my life”等，提高了文章的可讀性。