Hi, everyone! Believe it or not, I like sports very much. I have threebasketballs. I play basketball every day. After class, I always play basketball and淤my classmates. I think it’s relaxing and easy for me. I also have four footballs.And于I don’t play football. I only watch it on TV. It’s difficult. I don’t have avolleyball. I think it’s boring. I like playing table tennis best, because tabletennis is our national game. Sports are good to盂us. It is interesting to play sportsevery day.
優(yōu)點(diǎn):
這是一篇談?wù)擉w育用品及體育運(yùn)動(dòng)的短文。小作者先是概述自己非常喜歡運(yùn)動(dòng),接著再具體展開介紹擁有的運(yùn)動(dòng)物品及相關(guān)觀點(diǎn),最后總結(jié)全文,呼應(yīng)開頭。此外,本文靈活運(yùn)用了多個(gè)句式,增加了不少亮點(diǎn)??傊疚氖且黄晒Φ膶W(xué)生習(xí)作。
需要修改的地方院
①and 改為with。表“和某人打籃球”用介詞with。
②And 改為But。上下文表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系要用But。
③to 改為for。be good for 是固定短語(yǔ),意為“對(duì)……有好處”。
評(píng)分院
按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分20 的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn),本文修改前可得18 分。