曲永華

一、話題分析

圍繞“家庭生活”展開(kāi)想象， 從不同角度講述家庭生活方式以及怎樣正確地與家庭成員相處的問(wèn)題，同時(shí)培養(yǎng)學(xué)生積極向上的家庭觀和正確地待人接物的能力。針對(duì)這個(gè)話題，書(shū)面表達(dá)可能要求通過(guò)說(shuō)明的方式來(lái)“介紹家人和家庭生活”， 還可能從“如何與家人相處”的角度去命題。

二、例題呈現(xiàn)

學(xué)校英語(yǔ)社團(tuán)正在組織題為“My Family”的征文活動(dòng)。假如你是李明，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容提示用英語(yǔ)完成征文。

內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 三口之家，家庭幸福，鄰里和睦；

2. 父母為教師，在校深受歡迎；

3. 分擔(dān)家務(wù)，周末進(jìn)行戶外活動(dòng)；

4. 相互陪伴，經(jīng)常交流，良好家規(guī)助我成長(zhǎng)；

5. 請(qǐng)補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明一至兩點(diǎn)與家庭相關(guān)的情況。

注意：

1. 文中不得透露個(gè)人真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

2. 詞數(shù)：60～80；

3. 內(nèi)容連貫，不要逐條翻譯；

4. 標(biāo)題和開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：? popular adj. 受歡迎的? ? activity n. 活動(dòng)? ? rule n. 規(guī)矩

My Family

Im Li Ming.

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三、素材準(zhǔn)備

詞匯

have a happy family， popular in，

get along well with， try ones best to do sth.，

communicate with， work hard...

句子

There are ...

My parents are teachers， they are popular in the school.

... try my best to do some housework.

... go out for outside activities.

Good family rules help me grow up.

四、思路導(dǎo)引

五、佳作展示

My Family

Im Li Ming. I have a happy and warm family. There are three people in my family. They are my father， my mother and I. My parents are the teachers. They are popular in the school. I am a student. And I study hard.

We always communicate with each other. And my family accompanies each other. My family is so harmonious， and we share the things together. My family has a good relationship with our neighbors.

We do the housework together. My mother cooks meals. My father cleans the house. And I do the dishes. The good family rules help me grow up. We always do outdoor actives on the weekend. Sometimes my parents take me to different places to travel. That broadens my horizons.

That is my family. We love each other devotedly. What about you？

六、名師點(diǎn)評(píng)

這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，作者很好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語(yǔ)言表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，并能準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)。同時(shí)，作者能夠注意保持句子主謂一致，特別是還使用了一些亮點(diǎn)詞句，如popular in， communicate with， accompany each other， have a good relationship with， help sb. do 以及grow up。這些詞句的使用能增強(qiáng)邏輯關(guān)系，使句子通順、行文連貫。